Power's Review

Peer Review Worksheet – Inquiry Essay AJ Joslin review of Kristen Powers

Introduction:

What is the initial inquiry question?  Is it expressed clearly?  Why/why not?

The initial question is how much do grades matter? It is clearly stated at the top of the second page.

How does the author draw in the reader’s interest?  Can it more effectively?  Is this an inquiry with greater import?  Is it expressed? (note: it might be more effective expressed later in the inquiry.)

The author relates to college students or anyone who has gone to college. They talk about all nighters and getting sick and being stuck in a cycle. It drew my attention and I think it works well.

Do we know where the author prior knowledge?  Does s/he have a stake in the inquiry?

The author is a college student but their inquiry question was raised by the comment of a friend.

Voice:

How would you characterize the voice?  Is it effective for the subject material?  Do we believe in the inquisitiveness of the author (does this matter to him/her)?

The voice is very strong. The question does seems to interest the author due to the work load of college and question if it is worth it.

If the voice/tone breaks from type, point it out to the author.  Should it not?

The author tone is constant through the paper. They make the points that show that killing yourself for a 4.0 doesn’t benefit you as much as you’d think compared to B students.

Abstactions/Generalities: are there any instances where abstract ideas need specific details and concrete support for greater understanding?  Point these out.

I thought the points about future career and GPA would be in most need of being explained and everything was explained very well.

Body:

Is the author’s thought process evident?  Are we led smoothly from one section of the inquiry to the next?  Are there any questions/answers the author missed?  What are they?

Yes the author takes the comment made by a friend and transitions it very well from topic to topic.

Does the author question his/her own assumptions, findings, logic? 

The author finds that grades don’t matter as much as most people think the difference between a C and A don’t have much impact on the outcome as people think. The author stays with this side of the argument through the paper.

How is research effectively used?  Incorporation of quotes?  Does the research lead to other branchs of inquiry?  Intellectual disciplines?  Are there missed opportunities for expansion?

Research is effectively used. The author uses six strong resource and uses quotes from them to help her agreement.

Does the author maintain your interest?  How so?  Where does your attention lag?  Why?  How can it be fixed?

The Author keeps my attention through the paper because this is a question that relates to me as a college student.

Does the reader continue to broaden the inquiry?  Should it be further broadened, complicated?

              

Yes the author builds on her main question and relates real life examples into the paper.

Conclusion:

How does the conclusion operate? (Is an answer found?  Is the initial inquiry complicated, expanded?  Does it point to further inquiry?  Does it conclude with greater import/implications?)

The author ties up all of her ideas at the end and brings the paper to a close. Her question is answered and doesn’t leave any questions to be answered.

Is it effective?  Are you, the reader, satisfied with the ending?  Why, why not?  What are some suggestions for greater effectiveness?

I was content with the conclusions. It wraps up the paper very well.

Very good paper. Only problem was a few scattered grammar error but overall great.